Here’s a scratch recording of my latest. It’s not so much about me as it is about the general feeling not being good enough for someone else.
If Tuesday was my favorite weekend
If sunshine followed me around all day
If international symphonies were playing all the songs I sing
Maybe then you’d think of meIf Hanson was my favorite rock band
If Oprah called me her best friend
If baboons and bazookas were my favorite stuff
maybe then I’d be good enoughMAYBE THEN YOU’D SEE ME
MAYBE THEN YOU’D WANT ME
MAYBE THEN YOU’D NEED ME
MAYBE THEN I WON’T BE MEIf Latin was my native language
If flawless was my middle name
If perfectly proportioned was my family tree
maybe then you’d dream of me
I’d love your feedback! Mainly on lyrics & feel of the song… (I can hear the part where I’m flat. And when my guitar totally covers up my voice. This is not meant to be radio quality, but just to have a recorded idea down.)
Thoughts?
WOW
AWESOME
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love it!!
it is what my heart is constantly screaming.
i need to be content with me.
thanks for sharing your heart.
and if i was your neighbor i wouldn’t mind so much the music at ten pm.
Love the lyrics… love the concept… love the feel of almost all of it.
One thing I don’t love [and I know this is going to sound totally stupid, but I'm not knowledgeable about music so I don't know how else to say it] … at the end of the last line of the verses where it slows down and the notes go up [...maybe then I'd be good enough], it reminds me of the kind of thing that Adam Sandler does on his spoof songs, and so it kind of throws me off when you did it on a non-spoof song.
I told you that was going to sound stupid, but do you know what I mean?
I do know, and you don’t sound stupid. Thank you.
“if Oprah called me her very best friend”??
( trying to keep the same tempo as favourite rock band – quick beat?)
“If perfectly proportioned was my geneology”??
meaning if my genes made me ‘perfect’.
is the ‘You’ in the chorus God – or the person of our ‘dreams’?
or is the point we take from it what we most relate to so it is what the listener wants it to be?
Could be a great song (one many people like/relate to).
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God? not at all.
I’m not so sure you can say international symphonies…because technically a symphony is a work of music…not the orchestra that plays them.
You could say international orchestras or international symphony orchestras…but that might be a mouthful.
SHH!!! I was hoping no one would catch that.
i personally think it has a nice feel to it. i was kinda thinkin’ what russ said, but i’m just a snobby music nerd, so be not concerned with my opinions on that.
i likes it.
Wow, does that make me a snobby music nerd? Sheesh.
“If slow & sweeping symphonies were written for the songs I sing…”
Better?
Thanks, y’all.
I like that rewrite of that line.
It’s a fun song, I like the chorus a lot, and agree with Gitz on the end of verse thing too
Good idea and speaks to the general insecurity we all feel at some point. Love the catch though.
If we fit all those things someone else would see, want, need – we would cease to be who we are.
I definitely love the theme of the song! The end of the verse thing mentioned…reminds me of Laurie Berkner, a kids singer/musician. You could totally do kids songs with that style, easy…ever thought of it??
Not until I decided to write 100 this year!
I think this is going to be stuck in my head today…
Well, at first, I was surprised by the melody. It didn’t sound like I thought it would, and I wasn’t sure it fit the lyrics. But now that I’ve been sitting here, I’m still singing it. So it must have worked.
I really like the lyrics – I think most everybody has felt something similar at least once, if not a million times.
I love the lyrics, especially the last verse. I did sound like you were holding back when singing but I will guess that is because you didn’t want to disturb the neighbors.
I agree with Gitz that the change in tempo (?) in some parts of the song does seem a little off, but I am sure it would sound better if you performed it in a studio, instead of an apartment with thin(?) walls.
So it sounds like I need to can the last few notes and slurred tempo at the end of the verses. dang. And I thought it added to the tongue-in-cheek tone of the song.
Perhaps you could try a similar rythm? The way you play it, with the strum downs, perhaps you could keep it that way, but use hammer ons. The way you’re currently playing it makes it hard the for listener to really grasp the tempo.
I love these lyrics.
Love them.
i really like the lyrics. and for some reason, the very first line is my favorite.